by Sam Rasnake
In the back room someone plays a flute, missing notes now and again, stumbling through measures of pain into the head's deepest well. An old paper's musk of news spreads open the unsexed bed. By the window, a silk painting: small Chinese pagoda—empty— on the wall of a mountain pass, mist, one bird. The maple trembles at the glass, shakes loose its leaves while the moon's dark side braces for a direct hit from the broken planet. Spiders nest in my hair, walk over my chest. Their bite is hushed, unfelt. I move my toes for the last time. And the dog's barking grows fainter until I no longer recognize urgency in his wet jaws. - originally published in Poems Niederngasse
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The source for this piece was the anxiety after a dream. It originally appeared in Poems Niederngasse.
"An old paper's musk of news spreads open the unsexed bed." This line made my heart stop. This poem feels like the PeepingTom of my world...resonnates so personally with me, right down to images, tired & familiar. I played the flute, have a Chinese print of the wall, we will not mention my bed, I am terrified of spiders...need I go on! Uncanny, ironic and beautiful!
Dreams can be scary stuff. Or life, for that matter. Thanks for the read & comment, Jennifer.
This has that odd jumble of images and associations one experiences when coming to consciousness. Beautiful imagery. Love the description of the silk painting and the last line.
I appreciate your comments about imagery and consciousness in the piece, Tina. Thanks.
A direct hit..Into the head's deepest well. That's a description for me your work always suits. Looking forward to many more.
Thanks, DP. I appreciate the read. I hope I have many more.
Those last few lines really resonate--I love dogs and dog imagery wherever I find it. Nice work.
Thanks for the read, Rusty.
I could see this as a visual poem, though you have provided the images that don't need the enhancement. Wonderfully smooth and for me, time-stopping in the final image of the dog.
I appreciate your reading the piece, Susan, and for your comments about the imagery.
That;s a great last line Sam to round of a very rhythmic piece.
Lush and spare, that's a hard thing to do
beautiful
I appreciate your reading the piece, Susan, and the comment.
Thanks for commenting on the poem, Ajay.
Nice one, Sam. Rich with sound and images.
I appreiciate your comments, Christian. Thanks.
This is quite wonderful. I love the first line. Also the way most stanzas are constructed "diminuendo."
Thanks for your comments, Beate - especially about the structure.
i love this poem, its images and its fugal (yes!) ebb and flow. it speaks of abandonment but also activity, which seems bandaged: so much restrained struggle here! like the maple-moon stanza best, i think.
Abandonment is dead on, Finnegan. Thanks for your words here.