Three

Good on proportions, need music. Like this.

Great piece, Dorothee.

its like a minimalist donnie darko

I love how it is so short, telegraphic really, and yet still a story. I like the "like back then" reference: it's ambiguous enough that people can interpret it in different ways, but for me it evoked the few days after 9/11. I remember hearing a song on the radio for the first time after that after days of nothing but news and fear-mongering, and how it was like a return to life.

thanks so much for the feedback and the favs. this story was a bit longer first, then grew into its shape by cutting one line, then another, almost like carving it.

wow! i like it.

This story has excellent proportions. I really appreciate the structure of this. Very well done.

marvelous, i can only mirror what others have said: such good proportions, powerful.

I immediately liked this. Terse and enigmatic. The use of "Three" as title, structure, and symbol is intriguing in all its ambiguity, yet wide ranging in its suggestiveness with the various concrete elements/images in the piece. I know something is good if I want to imitate it--which I've done (using "Five" as my title & structure, etc.) and will post it on the group's story section to see if anyone thinks mine works--if only a bit as well as Dorothee's!